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>100 word challenge week #20

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 This is my first attempt at the 100 words challenge. My goodness it really makes you think! This week the challenge was to use one of these three phrases from the King James Bible in your 100 words:

…the powers that be  /  the apple of his eye  /   the writing on the wall…

If you want to learn more about the challenge, head over to Julia’s Blog
You sneak in through windows at 3am, mascara smudged, heels scuffed.
You glare at me when I ask you questions stomping off in a huff, slamming doors, cracking stuff.
I worry where you’ve been but more so where you’re headed. There’s so much I want to explain if you let me.
I can’t tell him what you’re really like, you’re the apple of his eye. The pain will leave him wounded, I can’t watch a grown man cry.
So I cover up,fix the window, make excuses, climb back into bed, closing my eyes hoping this time is the last time.
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  • Lisa Wields Words

    >Welcome to the challenge. This is so nicely done. That girl has trouble ahead, "the writing's on the wall." ;)

    I love the title of your blog and your description of yourself. Enjoy the circus!

    Lisa

  • Him Up North

    >Picturing this scene (and thanking my stars I don't have daughters, although nothing to stop boys wearing mascara I suppose). Great piece.

  • Sally-Jayne

    >Can picture this so clearly. My favourite line is "I worry where you’ve been but more so where you’re headed." It sums the piece up nicely. hope you've enjoyed you first week in the challenge. Look forward to reading your entries in future weeks.

  • HerMelness Speaks

    >That phase is brilliantly captured. Their unseeing that the worry is love for them – not about wanting to control them. Summed up beautifully in just 100 words.

  • Anna

    >Wow, powerful writing, summing up just how hard it is to watch your child make mistakes… Well written :)

  • Midlife Singlemum

    >This is very sad – I wonder if the mother is doing anyone any favours (least of all herself) by protecting the father and daughter from each other? I fear this is not going to end well. Beautifully written though.

  • Tinuke B

    >Thank you for all the comments, I think this is definitely a writing challenge I'll stick with, you guys are so supportive xx

  • Bill Dameron

    >This seems like a very real slice of life, with all of the worry and grittyness. Well done and welcome to the challeng.

  • SusanKMann

    >Welcome to the challenge, I hope you enjoyed it. I loved this piece, very powerful and yet sad. It is a hard thing to do to watch your child make mistakes. x

  • jfb57

    >Welcome, welcome, welcome! I'm so glad you found us because this is a such a great piece. The angst of knowing but not being able to tell plus the sadness of not having any control are brillaintly captured here. See you next week I hope!

  • Lorely

    >Don't know who's heading for the most trouble, her or her mum! Never sure who suffers the most – the kids going through their 'phase' or the parents who are desperately trying to steer the ship! Good piece! Hope to see more.

  • Tinuke B

    >you guys are so cool, thank you for your feedback xx

  • Anonymous

    >The question is what will be happen next/ be the outcome? A great first post . . . GSussex

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